tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10198109.post2712443404860561329..comments2024-03-12T04:52:23.124-05:00Comments on The Jane Day Reader: as-yet-untitled holiday verseAriel Gordonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14879719960202249424noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10198109.post-75588442946599387962007-08-07T01:05:00.000-05:002007-08-07T01:05:00.000-05:00Hi there -- "bare shoulders newel posts" is woth t...Hi there -- "bare shoulders newel posts" is woth the price of admission to this poem. And a brilliant two-word start. I'm hoping in future drafts stanza three will see some revision -- either by punctuation or line-break -- and some cleaning up of 'as'es as you go. Great job and all the best with re-writes between baby-times -- my daughter is three and I'm lucky when I get an hour in a week. CiaoAlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04808987149139563689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10198109.post-27196328504151354742007-08-02T11:41:00.000-05:002007-08-02T11:41:00.000-05:00Thanks, you two...I'll take 'stunningness' any day...Thanks, you two...I'll take 'stunningness' any day! <BR/><BR/>Though this IS a first draft...Ariel Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14879719960202249424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10198109.post-84475249333107307572007-08-02T10:45:00.000-05:002007-08-02T10:45:00.000-05:00I agree with Anita!I agree with Anita!Brenda Schmidthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03576550905189206215noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10198109.post-66811603065151599842007-08-02T07:36:00.000-05:002007-08-02T07:36:00.000-05:00This is total stunningness...I lack the poet vocab...This is total stunningness...I lack the poet vocab, but wish to express: I love it, love it, love it!Anita Daherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03258818779322124700noreply@blogger.com